Good poem/ cinquaiN?

2007-06-06 17:56:09  

Good poem/ cinquaiN? Hard to Say Goodbye
Sadly I Wander,
Trying so hard to be brave,
Murmuring I hear,
Your eyes full of such sadness,
As mine flow with tears.
Decent effort, but elementary. Also, "Murmuring I hear," does not mean whatever it was you thought it meant when you wrote it. Reconsider.